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"1, 2, 3, 4," I hear as I run to the best possible hiding spot in the house. When I open the closet filled to the roof I notice someone has already taken my spot but as I look around the room I hear "Ready or not here I come," I jump in the overstuffed closet and grab the hinge of the door, trying to make sure the pile of junk I am standing on is sturdy. "Bang," The door closes, "crunch," my finger gets crushed in the hinges. I scream bloody murder and the person that was looking for us instantly swings the door open. "Oh my gosh," says the person who opens the door noticing the amount of blood dripping from my finger. I fall to the ground in pain, blacking out.

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  1. I really like your details in this story. It is easy for the reader to understand what game the characters are playing even without you directly mentioning it. Great job!

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  2. This is very good imagery. Great use of onomatopoeia!

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